Firebid Boot

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Well time for some serious boot camp. Please enter Firebid so we can begin

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon Dec 01, 2014 2:08 am

"I can get food for us" Fran tells Charma.

"I can get water" Alina tells Charma.

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((no! stick to what I assigned you to fix! You can't progress until you do that thing. Look BACK to what I have taught you! Lets get this clear. You're NOT leaving here till I am truly satisfied. I might not work like other mods, but I do have my standards, and one of them is looking back on previous events in rp threads.))

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon Dec 01, 2014 4:04 am

"I can get that started for you" Charma asks the girls.

"We need a lot food and water, a lot of space for camping"Charma explains to the girls.

" I need somewhere to see the stars,I used to live in a palace myself"Charma tells the girls.

"Um that doesn't look right" Charma tells me, with sweat dripping down her face and blinking.

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((That last line wasn't needed at all. Listen, if you truly want to get out, you better listen to what I say. Looking back on a rp thread is helpful!!

While you are in here, all of your ocs need work. So can you please tailor them to the current OC sheet? This will save you a lot of work when you get out of here. Thanks))

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon Dec 01, 2014 4:38 am

"I can get that started for you" Charma asks the girls.

"We need a lot food and water a lot of space for camping"Charma explains to the girls.

"We need some where to see the stars, I used to live in a workshop myself"Charma tells the girls.

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((Why aren't you looking back??? Are you lazy or aren't you bothered to do so?))

RP Moderator Posts : 9973

(I'm sorry to interject James, but you seem to have forgotten the lessons of actions and exposition. What you have is so flat, no matter what you do you won't pass. Go back to the lessons you learned about exposition, review it and then come back)

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon Dec 01, 2014 4:50 am

(oh look back at all of it oh i get sorry slow learner)

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((Looking back on rps is REALLY important. It helps you how friendships and relationships has passed, read on any battles or pages you missed, and anything you need to remember later on. This is why I was stressing out on.

And I'm going to class 'slow learner' as an excuse. I keep telling you to look back time and time again but you won't listen. What's with that man?))

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon Dec 01, 2014 5:14 am

(oh okay i think the friendship between charma is mutual i think not sure)

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