Firebid Boot

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Well time for some serious boot camp. Please enter Firebid so we can begin

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Wed Nov 12, 2014 12:17 am

"Hey Alina,do you enjoy riding on the bus? Fran asking Alina. "

" No, I don't enjoy riding on the buses! yells Alina to Fran. I enjoy swimming in the ocean of Andros instead of riding on the bus Alina adds on calming down. "

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(You've missed the point. The end quote goes right next to the period after the person speaks. It's not that hard James.)

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Wed Nov 12, 2014 3:01 am

" Hey Alina, do you enjoy riding on buses? Fran asking Alina" .

"No, I don't enjoy on the buses! yells Alina to Fran I enjoy swimming in the ocean of Andros instead of riding on the bus Alina adds on claming down " .

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(You're not listening. The person finishes speaking the line, then use the end quote and then do the entire says Alina thing. Got it? It's not that hard. Take your time and do not rush.)

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Wed Nov 12, 2014 3:28 am

" Hey Alina, do you enjoy riding on buses? Fran asking Alina. "

" No,I don't enjoy riding on the buses! yells Alina to Fran. I enjoy swimming in the ocean of Andros instead of riding on the bus. Alina says calming down "

(Oh by the way i should stop slap typing starting today)

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(James, come on. I know you can do this. here is a good example for you to follow to see how its done right. "Bloom! Can you help me pick out a dress?" Stella projects loudly from her room. You see how its done? No spaces between the quote or Bloom's name, no space between the question mark and the quote and defiantly no quote after room. I know you can do this, so actually put the effort into this.)

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Wed Nov 12, 2014 3:45 am

"Hey Alina, do you enjoy riding on buses?" Fran asking Alina.

" No Fran,I don't enjoy riding on the bus! I enjoy swimming on Andros instead of riding on the bus "yells Alina to Fran.

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(Yes, you're doing! Now, just fix the second one right and we'll be on our way.)

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Wed Nov 12, 2014 4:06 am

" Hey Alina, do you enjoy riding on buses?" Fran asking Alina.

" No Fran, I don't enjoy riding on the bus!" yells Alina to Fran I enjoy swimming on Andros instead of riding on the bus Alina says to Fran calming down from yelling at her.

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(and you've regressed, you forgot new quotes. " No..... This is not ok. That extra space before the N needs to be gone. and that extra alina says to fran is not needed. Its redundant)

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