Firebid Boot

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Well time for some serious boot camp. Please enter Firebid so we can begin

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(You should have just posted it again and use *these instead of () these when doing an action, if you're not going to do normal exposition. It's less confusing and more acceptable.)

Faragonda still didn't reply due to the improper grammar of her student.

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Tue Oct 21, 2014 4:59 am

(yeah i fixed it now can we keep going please)

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(I'm sorry but that is not the right way to do speaking parts. Plus you failed to repost it. You edited, that is not what I wanted.)

Once again, the headmistress ignores the student like they weren't there.

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Tue Oct 21, 2014 1:12 pm

(oh no Fran gives her a different necklace it's not from the adventure)

(Fran enters Miss Faragonda's office)

( Oh hello Miss Faragonda Fran says)

( so why did Fran just give me this without explaining what i'm going to do with it" Alina thought to herself)walking to the person who Fran assigned her too

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The Headmistress ignores the student due to what was stated above.

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Tue Oct 21, 2014 4:01 pm

(Firebid, here's an example on how this should go. You use brackets for out of RP talk)

Fran enters Ms. Faragonda's office. "Oh hello, Headmistress Faragonda!" she said. (Is that too hard?)

Fran: *enters Ms. Faragonda's office.* Oh hello, Headmistress Faragonda! (this is more basic)

Fran knocks on Ms. Faragonda's office door politely and then enters "Oh hello, Headmistress Faragonda!" said Fran, greeting her headmistress as she sits down. (This is more detailed to the first and this is the best and most preferred way!)

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Tue Oct 21, 2014 11:35 pm

Fran knocks on Ms. Faragonda's office door politely and then enters "Oh hello, Headmistress Faragonda!" said Fran, greeting her headmistress as she sits down.

Meanwhile Alina walks over to the person Francine assigned to her and waited " So why did fran just give me a different necklace without explaining herself and she don't tell me what to do with this necklace either" she thought to herself.

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Faragonda didn't reply since what Fran said wasn't in her own way of writing and was copied from the post above.

Alina would continue to wait due to the poor grammar.

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Tue Oct 21, 2014 11:57 pm

Fran knocks on the office door and enters the office.

" Oh hello headmistress you wanted to see me" she asks.

Alina waits for her training teacher.

" i wonder why Fran just give me this different looking necklace and don't explain what to do with this but i guess i will have to wait for them" she says looking around to see if she could see her teacher.

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(still lacking grammar and the she says in the first part is not needed due to the second she asks.)

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