Firebid Boot

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Well time for some serious boot camp. Please enter Firebid so we can begin

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Wed Nov 26, 2014 11:12 pm

"How long is this going to take Charma? My feet are getting tired! " Alina complained to the charms fairy.

"Alina be patient! It's going to be take a while, so here play with these bubbles that I have", Fran said. She sighed and gave the bubble mixture and wand to Alina.

"Yay! Thanks Frannie! You're my best friend" Alina cheered, and hugged Fran. Fran replied "Your welcome Alina, but please don't call me Frannie since I don't really don't like that nickname at all."

(I'm just copying and paste the one you did sense you helped me i want to keep going)

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((I allow it this once, but next time, please rewrite that in your own words. It's not that fair that you are coping other people's work. It's like art. If you steal a piece of artwork and claim it as your own, it's not fair for the original artist and you will get slammed for it. This is why I'm implying the Slow Down, Think, then Post rule. It's suppose to help you to read what happened before, then think about what you want to post, then submit your post. Take your time, and don't rush.))
"It's going to be a while" Charma said, "We're not using the direct root."

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Thu Nov 27, 2014 2:28 am

"Oh okay that is fine i have a book about flowers in my bag" Fran tells Charma,while grabbing her book out of her bag.

" Oh that is fine by me i'm playing with my bubbles" Alina claims to Charma,while blowing a bubble.

( I will now be wording my own posts no more copying and pasting other peoples work)

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((you're slipping back to the oh's again...capital I, and the spaces. Soon I will be teaching you when to use oh and says at the right time as well.))

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Thu Nov 27, 2014 3:07 am

"That is fine i have a book about flowers in my bag" Fran tells Charma,while grabbing her book out of her bag.

"That is fine by me i'm playing with my bubbles" Alina claims to Charma,while blowing a bubble.

(oh sorry i removed oh okay and used what i was going use first my apologizes)

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((You still need to add spaces where the commas are, and you haven't fixed the capital I's yet))

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Thu Nov 27, 2014 3:28 am

"That is fine I have a book about flowers in my bag" Fran tells Charma, while grabbing her book out of her bag.

"That is fine by me I'm playing with my bubbles" Alina claims to Charma, while blowing a bubbles.

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((WOHOO!!! Though I could be picky with grammar and tenses, that is PERFECT!!!))
The three walked through the forest area.
"We are almost half way there" Charma told the pair, "I hope we reach to the lake soon."

Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Thu Nov 27, 2014 4:12 am

"Me too my foot are killing me and I would love to see a lot of amazing flowers" Fran claims to Charma.

" Yeah me too plus I want to eat something maybe or make my own bubbles or meet amazing sea creatures"Alina agrees with Fran,and mentions to Charma.

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

((spaces dude, spaces))

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