Zero of Zafarious

Subject: Zero of Zafarious Fri Jul 25, 2014 2:42 pm

Name: Zero
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Creature: Specialists
Race: Zafarious
Power: None
Allegiance: Neutral

Weapon: Crossbow

Strength:

Photographic Memory: Zero is able to recall any event from before his memories where wiped away from him. Other then this he can repeat back any scene from an 1 movie or any lecture in class.

Computer Wiz-Zero is extremly good with computers he can take an entire computer apart and reasemble it back to it's original shape. He can also turn computer parts even broken ones into a new object.

Good With Heights: Zero is extremly good with heights no matter how tall. He was born with natural good climbing talents due to hanging out with his older cousins who where often into wilderness classes.

Weaknesses:
Fire: He doesn't know why but when ever he sees even the tinest flame he goes crazy. He is just afraid of being burned by flames.

Bad Eyesight: Zero has terrible eyesight especially when the sunlight is strong.

Hydrophobia: One afternoon while playing with his sister at the lake he slipped in to the water and almost drowned leaving him with a fear of water for the rest of his life.

Uniform: Zero's uniform is the basic season 1 uniform that the specialists wear. He has the basic blue cape as well as a purple clasp.

Apperance: Zero is a sandy brown haired boy with deep brown eyes. He has fair skin and is very musclar. His height it 6'3 and his weight is 209 lbs. He wears a blue shirt with white stripped lines as well as blue jeans and black square glasses. He also has a pair of sunglasses that he wears on the most sunniest of days. His shoes are red and white and have black laces on them.

Personality: Due to his sibilings betraying during the test Zero has an extreme mistrust of people. He is very studious and loves to learn new things. However, at times when he is in a really good mood every now and again Zero will crack a smile. Even though he can be a loner at times but when he is out with a good friend or someone forces him to go outside after being stuck in the house all day Zero loves to go outside in the fresh air. Zero is also very curious about the world around him especially things that relate to the enviornment. He can also be very shy when he meets new people but over time he opens up to them. If something doesn't go Zero's way he will stand up and fight for what he believe's in. He also can explode easily and misinterprets what some people say. But at the end of the day Zero is a bright and caring person.

Back Story:
Even though Red Fountain was Zero's very last choice in all of the magic schools of Magix his first school choice was actually Zaltora the school for wizards. Born a Wizards and fairy's son magic ran through Zero's family blood. His mother, father, and even sister had the blood of magic inside them...except he was born without magic. This caused a great strain in the family due to the heir of the family must be a first born magic user. So due to his lack of magic Zero's cousin was forced to take his place.

Due to the fact that he was a non-magic user Zero was constantly disregarded and compared to his sister and brother and was often left out. Due to him being left out he was able to focus more on improving his basic survial skills such as hunting, cooking, climbing, and swimming. He even spent plenty of time in the kitchen with his mother creating a little more bonding time between the two.

In a tradition in Zero's city at the age of 14 when a child is ready to attend High School in Zafarious they are able to choose which school they go to...by passing a test created by the Elders of the city. Zero attempted to train with his cousin and sister but they shunned them out of their training sessions leaving him to train alone for 2 months by himself. On testing day he learned that he must work together with his cousin and sister in order to pass the test much to the other two's dismay.

During the test it begins to rain extremly hard as they climb the mountain (which the Elders where very impressed by his climbing skills). As he begins to help the other two on the next ledge a monster appears (not created by the Elders) which catches them off guard. As Zero attempts to draw his sword his cousin steals his sword and his sister pushes him off the ledge. Luckily the bushes from below manage to break Zero's fall however, the elders did not see the betrayal and failed the test. However, before the monster appeared he managed to impress some of the elders with his previous skills such as climbing and his impressive photographic memory so they choose the school of specalists Red Fountain for him to attend.

Subject: Re: Zero of Zafarious Fri Jul 25, 2014 3:30 pm

Here's a list of allowed gems. You cannot use Amethyst because it's not in the list, please pick one or two of the gems that are listed in the thread. I'm sorry but you must follow the rules.

Quote :: Binding: Binding is a purple liquid that is able to take out a person's magic from their body.

NO. That is considered over powered and will not be allowed. Please change it.

Quote :: His powers just awakened within himself so therefore, he doesn't know much about them or how powerful he actually is.

That is not acceptable. The only strong magic in the universe is the magic of the Dragon Flame which he doesn't have.

Please rank the spells High, Medium or Low.

Quote :: Origins: Zafarious [Explained in backstory] Current Origin: Andros

Where was Zero born? That's his origin.

Quote :: Strength: Zero is super smart and is able to hack into any data system and solve any problem given to him.
Photographic Memory: Zero is able to recall any event from before his memories where wiped away from him. Other then this he can repeat back any scene from an 1 movie or any lecture in class.

I'm not really okay with these two strengths but I'm going to let it slip. However I'd like to learn about them in his background.

Well you're going to have to change everything about his back story for sure but I'd like to know how his sister came to be? Isn't she supposed to be dead? I mean you stated that only Zero and his brother made it out alive... so?

You're also missing "Personality:" please add that and do us a favor and space out everything and align the text to the left so it could be easily read. Thank you.

Subject: Re: Zero of Zafarious Fri Jul 25, 2014 3:39 pm

Apparently you didn't read the backstory fully. His sister never dead she went missing. I am going to make a character for her but I don't see what's wrong with the backstory. And I edited.

Subject: Re: Zero of Zafarious Mon Aug 11, 2014 12:33 am

Just a few adjustments in these four areas; Origin, Strengths, Power and spells. And you're good to go. Otherwise, it may not be approved. I agree with the staff if you make some changes in you OCs status.

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I'm against the age shift spell. Just seems bit too much for a person who just found out their magic. I would pretty much do as Sarah suggests, but fix the strength, so either hack or photographic memory, I'm not gonna allow both.

Subject: Re: Zero of Zafarious Mon Aug 11, 2014 3:39 pm

Edited it I think

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I wouldn't say his love of reading is a strength, it's more a personality trait. I also think it would be better to mention when he lost his eye in his history.

Subject: Re: Zero of Zafarious Mon Aug 11, 2014 6:00 pm

zerowing21 wrote:: I wouldn't say his love of reading is a strength, it's more a personality trait. I also think it would be better to mention when he lost his eye in his history.

I never said he lost his eye.....and okay.

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He lost his right eye in a battle. That is from the appearance

Subject: Re: Zero of Zafarious Mon Aug 11, 2014 6:09 pm

Quote :: ~~Binding: Binding is a purple liquid that is able to take out a person's magic from their body. [I'm keeping this here for future refrences]~~

This should be removed as it's not necessary to be kept. If you'd like to use it for future references then I suggest you put it in Word or something.

Quote :: Bending Strike: Zero is able to bend and mold different rocks together and make them into something else. Even though this power seems useless it's actually good when it comes to making weapons. Power Level: High

Alexandrite is a psychic stone so I don't see how that fits, please change it.

Quote :: High Speed: High Speed is a spell where he is able to move very fast to the point where no one can see him. Power Level: Medium

This should be a high level spell as a medium level spell won't make him run that fast. I suggest you also add in low and medium level spells to even out the character so he isn't over powered or anything.

Quote :: His powers just awakened within himself so therefore, he doesn't know much about them or how powerful he actually is.

This should go into his backstory.

Quote :: >.> he just doesn't know how strong his magic is. I never said it was as powerful as the Dragon flame which it isnt.

Please remove that as it's also not necessary to be kept.

Quote :: He lost his right eye in a battle so he wears a black eye patch over it until he finds a replacement.

You should add something similar to that to the history as Zero said, explaining it in details.

Quote :: Caring For Animals: Even though zero can be heartless at some times he does have a passion for animals and loves cats especially!

How is this a strength? It's more of a personality trait.

Quote :: Reading: Zero loves to read and it takes him 2 days to read a 1,000 page story.

As Zero said ~~and I was trying to say but my browser hates me~~ him loving to read is a personality trait. So take out love and add something that makes it more of a strength whether it be analyzing, decoding or something along that line.

Quote :: People: Zero has a high distrust of people ever since his parents gave him up to revive the family company.

How is this a weakness? It's more of a personality trait.

Speaking of which, where is his personality? You're still missing that.

Quote :: The next year Zero appears out of thin air under the name of "Clarence" the son of the gem company Duel. There he learned the different types of gems and fell in love with Amethyst a deep purple gem with mysterious powers. An Earth quake hits the city of Tokyo when Zero is 10 killing his foster parents but leaving him and his younger brother alive. He is then taken in by his uncle where he takes them to Andros as he was scientist who was studying the aquatic life of the planet. With his brother and his Amethyst gem in tow they move to Andros together.

The owners of the gem company Duel are they his biological parents, adoptive parents or foster parents? same goes for his brother because I'm slightly confused since you said his parents gave him away and never mentioned a brother before. You'll also have to change Amethyst into Alexandrite.

Quote :: One night on Andros Zero and his brother witness his uncle displaying mysterious powers a bright blue liquid flowing from is body taking away magic power from mermaids. His uncle catches them and tries to kill them both but fails and only captures his brother. Out of his rage of not wanting to loose his brother he also displays the same power and rips his uncle from his magical abilities thus saving them both. Shortly after his uncle dies a month later after rapidly growing older leaving the two in the care of their aunt in law Sarah who took them in and treated them as a family.

You'll have to change this because Zero does not have the same powers as his uncle since we wouldn't allow the power for Zero but seeing that his uncle his dead, you can keep it for his uncle as it doesn't matter anyways.

Quote :: In the following years Zero went through his research to discover the origin of his and his uncle's power. Over the years as he was developing his power he began to show more unique ablities such as photo graphic memory and super genuis.However, he hasn't been successful until recently when his sister appears displaying the same power only a red liquid. Kara was in search of her long lost brother and tracked him down in Andros.
His sister attacks his house but is able to defend it along side his brother. The three decide to team up and find the secret of this power which apparently is back in his family's old laboratory. On a planet called Zafarious which is currently being ran by the same corp who attacked his family.

Again you'll have to change this because Zero doesn't have these powers but feel free to keep the part where he researches to learn how is uncle got it. Since you said you'll be turning his sister into an oc, even if you won't, she can't have that power either. So this is why I asked you to change all of the backstory because of the changes we asked you to make.

Sorry if this is long for you or if it's too much but these are changes that must be done so I can give my approval.