Emily, fairy of water

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Name: Emily
Age: 16
Gender: Female
What creature are you? Fairy
Ethnicity: Chinese-Canadian
Race: Earth
Allegiance: Good guys
Origins: Magic User
Power: Water
Attack Spell: Bind (low)
(Magic pearls form chains that tie the enemy up, one chain for each enemy and 5 chains max. This attack has some swirling water around it.)
Magic Scythe (low)
(Magic pearls form a scythe that can attack 5 people max at once if they're standing in a perfectly straight line. the scythe itself dissolves into water if it hits something like a wall and Emily will have to summon this attack again.)
Love Railgun (med)
(fires a heart-shaped magical water-drop bullet towards the enemy; the gun is formed from magical pearls too, it's quite hard to dodge this attack. it doesn't cause much damage to the enemy, but it causes quite an amount of pain. The bullet makes a splash if it hits something like a wall. Emily can fire multiple times as long as she doesn't unsummon this attack by using another spell.)
Defense Spell: Aegis Shield (med)
(Magic pearls form glowing points that via magical energy linking all of them together form a force-field that reflects all attacks that aren't as strong as Believix attacks. The entire shield dissolves into water if something at least as strong as Believix powers hit it and Emily has to summon this spell again.)
Appearance:

Normal Form:

Fairy Form:

Strengths: Solving math problems in general in mere seconds but some problems by her high school algebra teacher does really stump her (She is taking Algebra 2 as a freshman in the Gifted Program), programming complex computer software, Piano Virtuoso Prodigy, Sword-fight duels

Weaknesses: Every attack, block or bind she fires drains her life energy and she needs time to recover from that. Is vulnerable to electric fairies and witches by 30% and thus is electrocuted easily by their attacks. Is vulnerable to earth fairies and witches by 20% because plants absorb water. Can only stay underwater for less than or equal to 10 minutes being a low-level water fairy.

Personality: She's light-hearted and easy-going most of the time. She loves to joke and is quick to anger. When the scenario is tense, she's absolutely serious though. Sometimes when she's hyper or angry, she'll start babbling in a high, nasal, kawaii voice. She cries pretty often when something or someone makes her really sad but strangely never sheds tears. She also gets very impatient very easily. She is overly obedient to her parents, thus giving her dad the impression of her being a hominid computer, but is very wary of being obedient to all other people unless if she is closer to them than normal best friends are. She loves Chinese food, especially dumplings. She also loves pizza, pasta, ravioli, and lasagna. She is a lousy liar. Every time she attempts to lie, it shows on her face completely, thus she typically desires to be overly frank with others. She loves flowers and has a "phobia" of flying balls and thus does not play any sport regarding balls. She hates people calling her short and patting her on the head. She is immature and acts young for her age. She likes listening to J-pop.

History:
Emily was an artificial lab-created baby with the selected "perfect" genetic information of both of her parents. Then, the embryo/fetus was inserted into her mother's womb. Emily has a rare talent for playing the piano, which causes her to have a strange glowing aura surround her everytime she plays the piano (She's been playing piano ever since May of 8th grade and that was when the aura started to appear). Most people don't notice it much though. Emily has been in the Gifted Program ever since the beginning of middle school. Emily was a straight A student for 3 consecutive years at her middle school back on Earth. During middle school she made friends with two E-class land mages, Kara and Adriane, two human girls, Larissa and Adelle, and a piano virtuoso prodigy, Myatani. She's now a freshman in high school. She made one new friend, Abigail. Emily has always had trouble writing essays and still does because she often strays from her topic sentence(She has a B+ in English and As in all the other classes: AP World History, Chemistry, IB French 3, Algebra 2; etc. She encountered the Winx one day in the past autumn during her first try-out as a teenage idol at a global dance battle between two veteran idol groups from different countries and the American one needed an extra idol to boost its points. The Winx were visiting the idol show because all of them love listening to music, especially Musa and also because they were tracking the positive energy of a new Earth fairy who they were looking for. The Winx weren't precisely invited as no one knew they and were coming (The Winx disguised themselves as the average humans and entered a tad low-profile to not attract too much attention to themselves). She is working hard to get her English grade up to an A- as this semester is drawing to a close so she can get a 4.0 GPA for this semester. She is still friends with Kara, Adriane, Larissa, Adelle and Abigail. She is on her high school's girls' cross country team, but isn't the fastest runner. She takes piano and violin private lessons, but isn't as good at playing the violin as she is at playing the piano. Her parents are very strict and well-to-do. She is still being a teenage idol and participated in the first stage of a international idol contest and won first place among five other teams out of 39 teams (still two more stages left to go). Emily is also excited to go to Alfea so she can train to be as powerful a fairy as Bloom so that she can protect the people most important to her.  Another goal Emily has is to become as great a piano player as Myatani and somehow make it to being able to perform at Carnegie Hall. Emily also dreams of getting a BMW X5 SUV of her own and a big mansion to live in plus some servants to serve her loyally. Because Emily is a water fairy she has some ability in morphing water into whatever shape she likes. She can thus form pearls out of water with a few incantations and some movement of her hand.

Half the bio is about her friend and not her. And someone can not just gain their friends aura since she helped her learn to play. That part really doesn't fly with me. You need to seriously need to work on this history since you spend nearly half of it talking about her friend and then jumping to the concert thing with the Winx. What else happened in her life?

I hope it's less jumpy now as I revised that part and there's really nothing else that happened in her life besides the mundane events most people experience.

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Power: Magic Pearl

Whoa, hang on there. You put Water in the title for this thread. Either change the title to suit the power or change the power to suit the title.

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Emily has a rare talent for playing the piano, which causes her to have a strange glowing aura surround her everytime she plays the piano.

When did she start playing the piano? And when did that aura start to appear?

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Weaknesses: Every attack, block or bind she fires drains her life energy and she needs time to recover from that. Is vulnerable to electric fairies and witches by 30% and thus is electrocuted easily by their attacks. Is vulnerable to earth fairies and witches by 20% because plants absorb water. Can only stay underwater for less than or equal to 10 minutes.

The only thing wrong with this is that, there a lack of other weaknesses that affects her other than her powers. You MUST add that in.

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She encountered the Winx one day during her first try-out as a teenage idol when the Trix threw the show into chaos. The Winx were visiting the idol show because all of them love listening to music, especially Musa.

What exactly happened during that attack? And what kind of try out was it? Was it something similar to X Factor or American Idol? Or was it a local competition?

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Emily has always had trouble writing essays and still does.

Why does she have trouble writing essays?

You really need to expand on her history more. And I mean by about what she did when she was growing up. What was her life during school? What else do we need to know?

yukai5 wrote:

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Weaknesses: Every attack, block or bind she fires drains her life energy and she needs time to recover from that. Is vulnerable to electric fairies and witches by 30% and thus is electrocuted easily by their attacks. Is vulnerable to earth fairies and witches by 20% because plants absorb water. Can only stay underwater for less than or equal to 10 minutes.
The only thing wrong with this is that, there a lack of other weaknesses that affects her other than her powers. You MUST add that in.

Wait, I thought Flame Melody didn't want me to do that.

shikiryougi wrote:

yukai5 wrote:

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Weaknesses: Every attack, block or bind she fires drains her life energy and she needs time to recover from that. Is vulnerable to electric fairies and witches by 30% and thus is electrocuted easily by their attacks. Is vulnerable to earth fairies and witches by 20% because plants absorb water. Can only stay underwater for less than or equal to 10 minutes.

The only thing wrong with this is that, there a lack of other weaknesses that affects her other than her powers. You MUST add that in.

Wait, I thought Flame Melody didn't want me to do that.

I think you misunderstood Flame Melody. From what I understand, she basically wanted you is to find a balance in your weaknesses for Emily. You can still have the power weaknesses, which are great by the way, but you also need personal weaknesses, like what is she afraid of for example. I mean, why is restricted to 10 minutes while she's underwater? You have to make sure that it is balanced.

is the OC better now?

Being short isn't a weakness really and how is being sunburned easily a true weakness either? I also don't think you answered all the previous questions either. What was the exact reason the Winx were there in the first place besides the music? Where they asked to come to the show? We need these details.

zerowing21 wrote:

Being short isn't a weakness really and how is being sunburned easily a true weakness either? I also don't think you answered all the previous questions either. What was the exact reason the Winx were there in the first place besides the music? Where they asked to come to the show? We need these details.

Huh? What previous questions did I miss?

There were several that Chrissie asked in her first post in the thread that you didn't answer. go back a page to look at them.

zerowing21 wrote:

There were several that Chrissie asked in her first post in the thread that you didn't answer. go back a page to look at them.

That I have to agree. There was one in particular about the idol competition. I didn't ask what it's about, I asked what KIND it was.