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zerowing21
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Posts : 9973
 | Subject: Firebid Boot  Sun Oct 19, 2014 7:36 am | |
| First topic message reminder :
Well time for some serious boot camp. Please enter Firebid so we can begin | |
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Kyra_Xyrespace
Super Moderator
 
Posts : 1182
Age : 31
Location : America
Hobbies : Writing, playing games, moderating on another forum
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Sun May 24, 2015 4:13 am | |
| - Kyra_Xyrespace wrote:
- Please fix the punctuation in the quotes. You are missing quite a few commas in the quotes. See this post for an example of what I mean.
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| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Sun May 24, 2015 4:51 am | |
| "Hey Alina,How are you doing today Alina"Fran says excited!
"Hey Fran,what are you so excited about like I really care about what it is" Alina says not amused.
"Oh nothing,I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group,I want to take you with me" Fran says with glee.
"No,I'm not going forget it Fran,I'm not going with you" Alina shouts at Fran with anger.
"Aww,but it's going to not be fun without you,please come with me pretty please" Fran says pleading Alina to go.
"No,I'm not going that is final don't ask me again"Alina screams getting more angry she is red to the face with anger.
" Fine then,I'm not going at all I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend " Fran yells to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her bedroom door angry with Alina.
"Oh Fran,I just don't like them like you do Fran" Alina thinks to herself and went to her and Fran's room upset with Fran and going to listen to music to drown out Fran's crying. | |
| | | | Kyra_Xyrespace
Super Moderator
Posts : 1182
Age : 31
Location : America
Hobbies : Writing, playing games, moderating on another forum
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Sun May 24, 2015 5:15 am | |
| - Kyra_Xyrespace wrote:
- Please fix the punctuation in the quotes. You are missing quite a few commas in the quotes. See this post for an example of what I mean.
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| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Sun May 24, 2015 5:37 am | |
| "Hey Alina,How are you doing today Alina! Fran says excited"
"Hey Fran,what are you so excited about like I really care about what it is. Alina says not amused"
"Oh nothing,I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group,I want to take you with me.Fran says with glee"
"No,I'm not going forget it Fran,I'm not going with you. Alina shouts at Fran with anger"
"Aww,but it's going to not be fun without you,please come with me pretty please.Fran begs to Alina on her knees"
"No,I'm not going that is final don't ask me again. Alina screams getting more angry she is red to the face with anger"
"Fine,then I'm not going at all I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend. Fran yells to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her bedroom door angry with Alina"
"Oh,Fran I just don't like them like you do Fran.Alina thinks to herself and went to her and Fran's room upset with Fran and going to listen to music to drown out Fran's crying" | |
| | | | Kyra_Xyrespace
Super Moderator
Posts : 1182
Age : 31
Location : America
Hobbies : Writing, playing games, moderating on another forum
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon May 25, 2015 1:37 am | |
| - Kyra_Xyrespace wrote:
- Please fix the punctuation in the quotes. You are missing quite a few commas in the quotes. See this post for an example of what I mean.
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| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon May 25, 2015 3:06 am | |
| " Hey Alina, How are you doing today Alina ! Fran says excited "
" Hey Fran, What are you so excited about ? Alina says not amused "
" Oh nothing, I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group,I want to take you with me.Fran says with glee "
" No, I'm not going forget it Fran, I'm not going with you. Alina shouts at Fran with anger "
" Aww, But it's going to not be fun without you,please come with me pretty please.Fran begs to Alina on her knees "
" No, I'm not going that is final. Alina screams getting more angry she is red to the face with anger "
" Fine, Then I'm not going at all I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend. Fran yells to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her bedroom door angry with Alina "
" Oh Fran, I just don't like them. Alina thinks to herself and went to her and Fran's room upset with Fran and going to listen to music to drown out Fran's crying " | |
| | | | Flame Melody
Administrator
Posts : 4857
Age : 2022
Location : 1313 Webfoot Walk, Duckberg
Hobbies : Scaring/Banning members c: - We'll fairy you!
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon May 25, 2015 8:32 am | |
| Firebid, your sentences are almost correct. Except for some small problems. Make sure to fix the positions of where you place the closing quote marks. | |
| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon May 25, 2015 9:09 am | |
| " Hey Alina, How are you doing today " Alina Fran says excited !
" Hey Fran, What are you so excited about ? Alina says not amused "
" Oh nothing, I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group,I want to take you with me.Fran says with glee "
" No, I'm not going forget it Fran, I'm not going with you. Alina shouts at Fran with anger "
" Aww, But it's going to not be fun without you,please come with me pretty please.Fran begs to Alina on her knees "
" No, I'm not going that is final. Alina screams getting more angry she is red to the face with anger "
" Fine, Then I'm not going at all I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend. Fran yells to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her bedroom door angry with Alina "
" Oh Fran, I just don't like them. Alina thinks to herself and went to her and Fran's room upset with Fran and going to listen to music to drown out Fran's crying "
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| | | | Flame Melody
Administrator
Posts : 4857
Age : 2022
Location : 1313 Webfoot Walk, Duckberg
Hobbies : Scaring/Banning members c: - We'll fairy you!
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon May 25, 2015 9:14 am | |
| You didn't change a thing, Firebid. Make sure to place the " for speaking lines only. | |
| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Mon May 25, 2015 10:40 am | |
| "Hey Alina, How are you doing today" Alina Fran says excited !
"Hey Fran, What are you so excited about ? Alina says not amused"
"Oh nothing,I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group I want to take you with me.Fran says with glee"
"No, I'm not going forget it Fran, I'm not going with you. Alina shouts at Fran with anger"
"Aww, But it's going to not be fun without you,please come with me pretty please.Fran begs to Alina on her knees"
"No, I'm not going that is final. Alina screams getting more angry she is red to the face with anger"
"Fine, Then I'm not going at all I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend. Fran yells to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her bedroom door angry with Alina"
"Oh Fran, I just don't like them. Alina thinks to herself and went to her and Fran's room upset with Fran and going to listen to music to drown out Fran's crying"
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