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zerowing21
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 | Subject: Firebid Boot  Sun Oct 19, 2014 7:36 am | |
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Well time for some serious boot camp. Please enter Firebid so we can begin | |
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Kyra_Xyrespace
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| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Fri May 22, 2015 12:15 am | |
| Firebid, you need to also fix the punctuation inside the quotes.
I'll provide an example (I will color the punctuation blue):
"But the courtyard is empty, making it the perfect time to play around," Gavvy argued. | |
| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
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| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Fri May 22, 2015 12:24 am | |
| "Hey Alina,How are you doing today best friend" Fran says excited!
"Hey Fran,what are you so excited about like I really care about what it is" Alina says not amused.
"Oh nothing,I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group and I want to take you with me" Fran says with glee.
"No I'm not going forget it Fran I'm not going with you" Alina shouts at Fran with anger.
"Aww but it's going to not be fun without you please come with me pretty please" Fran says pleading Alina to go.
"No I'm not going that is final,don't ask me again"Alina screams getting more angry she is red to the face with anger.
"Fine then I'm not going at all,I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend" Fran says to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her room door.
"Oh Fran I just don't like them like you do Fran" Alina thinks to herself and went to her and Fran's room upset with Fran and going to listen to music to drown out Fran's crying.
Last edited by firebid1030 on Sun May 24, 2015 3:59 am; edited 1 time in total | |
| | | | Flame Melody
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| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Fri May 22, 2015 3:02 am | |
| Firebid, please make sure to add a space after your commas. Also, add ending marks properly inside the quote marks. Also, add spaces after the quote marks ". Also, remove the very last comma you placed. You also wrote "won" instead of "won't". | |
| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Fri May 22, 2015 3:20 am | |
| Hey Alina, How are you doing today best friend" Fran says excited about something !
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"Hey Fran, what are you so excited about like I really care about what it is" Alina says not so very interested in what it is.
"Oh nothing much, I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group and I want to take you with me" Fran says jumping up and down excited.
"No I'm not going forget about it Fran, I'm not going with you" Alina yells at Fran with anger.
"Aww but it won't be fun without you, please come with me pretty please" Fran says begging Alina to go.
"No I'm not going that is final, don't ask me again" Alina says getting more angry she is red to the face with anger.
"Fine then I'm not going at all, I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend" Fran says to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her room door.
"Oh Fran I just don't like them like you do Fran" Alina says to nobody because Fran left and went to her room upset with her. | |
| | | | Flame Melody
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| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Fri May 22, 2015 4:09 am | |
| Please insert end marks before you close the quote marks. | |
| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Fri May 22, 2015 4:19 am | |
| " Hey Alina, How are you doing today best friend " Fran says excited about something " !
" Hey Fran, what are you so excited about like I really care about what it is " Alina says not so very interested in what it is.
" Oh nothing much, I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group and I want to take you with me " Fran says jumping up and down excited.
" No I'm not going forget about it Fran, I'm not going with you " Alina yells at Fran with anger.
" Aww but it won't be fun without you, please come with me pretty please " Fran says begging Alina to go.
" No I'm not going that is final, don't ask me again " Alina says getting more angry she is red to the face with anger.
" Fine then I'm not going at all, I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend " Fran says to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her room door.
" Oh Fran I just don't like them like you do Fran " Alina says to nobody because Fran left and went to her room upset with her. | |
| | | | Flame Melody
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Posts : 4857
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| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Fri May 22, 2015 8:12 pm | |
| No Firebid, end marks are the period, question mark, and the exclamation mark. Not extra spaces. Try again. | |
| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Fri May 22, 2015 10:52 pm | |
| "Hey Alina, How are you doing today best friend" Fran says excited about something" !
"Hey Fran, what are you so excited about like I really care about what it is ? " Alina says not so very interested in what it is.
" Oh nothing much, I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group and I want to take you with me " Fran says jumping up and down excited.
"No I'm not going forget about it Fran, I'm not going with you" Alina yells at Fran with anger.
"Aww but it won't be fun without you, please come with me pretty please" Fran says begging Alina to go.
"No I'm not going that is final, don't ask me again" Alina says getting more angry she is red to the face with anger.
"Fine then I'm not going at all, I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend" Fran says to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her room door.
"Oh Fran I just don't like them like you do Fran" Alina says to nobody because Fran left and went to her room upset with her.
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| | | | Kyra_Xyrespace
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Posts : 1182
Age : 31
Location : America
Hobbies : Writing, playing games, moderating on another forum
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Sun May 24, 2015 3:37 am | |
| Please fix the punctuation in the quotes. You are missing quite a few commas in the quotes. See this post for an example of what I mean. | |
| | | | firebid1030
Sirenix Fairy
Posts : 15411
Age : 33
Location : aurora colorado
Hobbies : working , playing on computer/phone, watch television/youtube videos, hanging with friends and family,,going to the movies,sleeping
| | Subject: Re: Firebid Boot Sun May 24, 2015 4:00 am | |
| "Hey Alina,How are you doing today best friend" Fran says excited!
"Hey Fran,what are you so excited about like I really care about what it is" Alina says not amused.
"Oh nothing,I just won two tickets to my favorite boy group and I want to take you with me" Fran says with glee.
"No,I'm not going forget it Fran I'm not going with you" Alina shouts at Fran with anger.
"Aww,but it's going to not be fun without you please come with me pretty please" Fran says pleading Alina to go.
"No,I'm not going that is final,don't ask me again"Alina screams getting more angry she is red to the face with anger.
"Fine then I'm not going at all I just wanted to have fun with you my best friend" Fran yells to Alina running away crying with tears running down her face and closing her bedroom door angry with Alina.
"Oh Fran I just don't like them like you do Fran" Alina thinks to herself and went to her and Fran's room upset with Fran and going to listen to music to drown out Fran's crying. | |
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