Kayla, Fairy of the Sparkling Flame

Subject: Kayla, Fairy of the Sparkling Flame Mon Aug 10, 2015 4:01 am

Name:Kayla
Age:17
Gender: Female
Creature: Fairy
Allegiance: Good Guys
Race:Planteressia
Origins: Magic User
Powers: Sparkling Flame
Spells: Fire Energy (high)-can get fire in her environment or make her own fire and "shoot" it at her opponent. The attack renders the opponent powerless for 1 minute while they heal from the burns.
Fire Wall (high)-can make a fire wall to block her opponent. The wall can be as much as 18-20 metres high. It can either be used as a shield or it can trap an enemy by surrounding them, making them unable to escape from or dodge it by shocking and burning those who pass through it. The wall lasts for 2 minutes.
Hot Spring (low)-able to burn her opponent temporarily with scalding heat. This pain lasts for 50 seconds.
Fire of Life (medium)-can help heal someone's bodily injuries a little faster with heat, In cold conditions, this spell can prevent someone from getting hypothermia since it provides heat resistance with fire to the cold.
Fire Illusion (low)-This is mainly a scare tactic spell. It can create fake fire around an opponent, so that that they are scared to move. The illusion lasts for 1 minute
Fire Travel (medium)-creates a mobile "vehicle" that allows the spell caster to move away from opponent. The vehicle can take someone up to 2 miles away in 1 minute.
Flying Sparks (medium)-Shoots sparks at opponents as much as 10 metres away. Tranquilizes them so that they are unconscious and unable to move for 30 seconds.
Appearance:
Kayla has brown hair. She has green eyes and red lips. Her Winx outfit is a orangeish/yellowish dress with boots of similar color. She wears a heart shaped necklace given to her by her mom.
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Strengths:. She has the best grades in her science classes, especially physics/thermodynamics. As a child, she learned the best ways for people to save energy, how to use natural resources such as gas and electricity, and how metabolism in the body uses heat. She is also very athletic because of her fast reaction time and upper body strength that she developed from her training. She can read people's emotions well.
Weaknesses: She easily gets angry when life doesn't go her way and doesn't like to admit to others when she's wrong due to her stubborn nature and pride. She can also be too competitive in sports.
Personality: She is a headstrong and stubborn girl. Since Kayla has fire powers, she is interested in how heat relates to physics. She is heavily interested in how physics affects the universe, especially in how her powers affect the world around her. Because she is stubborn, she might appear to be impolite on the surface. However, she hides her social phobia and is really more vulnerable and nicer than she seems. She also has a tendency to lash out at people for no reason. She is very knowledgeable about the universe due to the research, projects, and studying about the physical world that she did as a child. Kayla is well versed in how thermodynamics affects the climate on Planteressia, electricity, the orbit of the the two moons of Planteressia, the length of how long fire can burn, and friction. She bestows people with her intelligence by teaching them how to save energy in their homes and about talking to people about thermodynamics. She is very good at abstract thinking due to her affinity for the sciences.
History:
17 years ago Kayla was born on the planet of Planteressia, to two parents and two twin sisters, Magica and Lisa. She was the second triplet to be born and her parents knew there was something special about her. Her mother hoped she would be a powerful fairy just like her and made her a heart necklace when she was 18 months old to signify her love for her. On her 4th birthday, she received her pet rabbit, Lila, as a gift. She was always exposed to the magical world, since her family was full of fairies including her parents, and wizards. As a kid, her sisters always made fun of her because they got their powers at a young age, except for her. When she started school at Planteressia Elementary, the teachers were worried she would not catch up to the other kids. The parents were worried she never get her powers. When she was 8, one night she overheard her parents talking about this and she became sad, worried, and fearful. From that moment on, she tried to show her family and peers that she could be strong even without her magic.
It was difficult for her at first. She developed a social phobia when she was younger because people made fun of her for her inability to cast spells and her clumsiness. She also developed a stubborn and mean disposition with a tendency to lash out at others because she tried to act tough as she was constantly being bullied. She developed a lack of confidence and low self-esteem because of her magical deficiencies.

One day, at lunchtime when she was eating, a group of kids threw eggs at her and cursed her. The fairy ran home crying and refused to go to school for 2 weeks, though she went against her will. As she was sitting alone in the backyard, crying and depressed one afternoon, her mother came up to her and explained how she was slow to develop her powers and because of that, it contributed to her clumsiness. Kayla remembered the most important thing her mother said, "Never give up." From that day on, that was her motto. Nevertheless, Kayla still struggled with proving herself in other areas besides magic.

Sports was definitely not an innate talent for the fairy. Though she struggled with coordination, she practiced running and basketball at the gym every night. She improved little by little. Then, in the fifth grade, she wanted to join the track and lacrosse teams. However, the coach and the teams barred her from playing due to her lack of coordination. Kayla needed something to fill up her time and was desperate to avoid staying home alone again without any friends. She begged the coaches to let her on the teams and they did so reluctantly, but she was usually benched. She observed the other people playing on the teams and desired to be part of them. She talked to the coaches and they told her they would her her play if she trained with a star player, Lydia.

Immediately after school, Lydia would train with Kayla. She taught her how to lift weights and do other exercises for upper body strength. Kayla was still not coordinated enough however, and she would often fail to listen to Lydia. The two were often frustrated with each other. Lydia gave her an ultimatum to listen to her or quit the teams and Kayla finally listened. She improved her upper body strength and her coordination skills. The two became friends, though they often fought a lot because of Kayla's abrasive nature. Kayla was still guarded around her and was unwilling to divulge her deepest secrets for fear of rejection. Eventually, they accepted her on the sports teams and she was able to prove herself as a valuable player. Even though she was not as good as Lydia, she was a decent player and some of her classmates recognized her ability. She still experienced bullying on the team and would fight with other members or people when they criticized how she threw or ran.

Kayla still had few friends, since she would lash out at others, making her unapproachable and because she was not very sociable. In order to make an escape, she delved into her studies. She did very well in academics, especially in her science classes. She explored other areas of the universe, such as physics and thermodynamics. At age 10, she was coming up with her own formulas and doing her own science experiments.. Of course, her intelligence didn't help her get along with her other two sisters, as they were always jealous of how talented and gifted she was in academics and sports. They dubbed her "the worthless triplet" because she was yet to get her powers. Magica and Lisa always insulted her, calling her a "nerd" and "foolish" in front of others because of this or because she made a mistake. This lead to her developing a more stubborn and harsh disposition because she was scared to admit when she needed help or when she made a mistake and she was scared to show others how smart she was. Also, she never totally got over her social phobia, which is why she hardly let others, even her friend Lydia, see her vulnerable side, and would appear to be abrasive and cocky at times. In class one day she met another fairy named Selena, whom she could relate to. They were both nerds and social outcasts who had very bad social skills. They bonded over this and got along very well. Soon Lydia, Carter, Selena's friend, Selena, and Kayla were all friends. Kayla got better in sports and became a star player as well, but she developed an overcompetitive air to make up for her weaknesses, making her lose her two friends, Lydia and Carter. Her only friend was Selena, and she let Kayla cry on her shoulder the day she fought with the other two. She would not see them again for years.

She waited and waited for her powers. As she became a teenager her parents gave up hope that she would get her powers. They decided to enroll her in high school after her 14th birthday. Then one day, something magical happened. She found out about her powers when she was 14 during a thunderstorm when she was scared and she inadvertently Kayla was shocked that this was happening to her. She noticed that the flames were sparkling. She told her entire family and her sisters did not believe her and laughed at her. Then she showed them the candles and the other two looked at each other and knew at that moment it was definitely magic, since they had no matches or lighters. They had looks of utter shock on their faces upon their realization. The parents were overjoyed and they threw a party for their special daughter. Her two other sisters still resented her at first, but the family got together one day after a long talk, Kayla made up with her sisters and they formed a strong and loving bond. A few months later, she started attending magic school.

Life at the Training Academy:
Once Kayla arrived at the magic academy, she struggled with her coordination once again. This didn't help with her powers, as she often struggled to cast spells and if she did, she would accidentally cast the wrong one. She was not confident with her magic. Her teacher, Mrs. Ferril, saw her predicament and took her under her wings so she could develop her power more . The fairy was eager to look at all the heat spells that she could use in the magic dimension. She attended classes during the day and and magic training in the afternoons and evenings. She experienced the same bullying she dealt with in elementary school because she could not use her powers as well as other students and she again dealt with social isolation. She was always disgraced in public because she would hurt others with her magic. Therefore, she was careful to avoid extracurriculars and other people. It took Kayla a while to get better at using her newly trained powers. She would often fight with Mrs. Ferril and because of her inferiority complex, she would want to do things her own way. Ferril was very understanding and broke things down so Kayla would listen and improve. One day as she was in class, she met another fairy. She introduced herself as Lydia. Soon Lydia remembered the fairy with whom she fought and the two immediately apologized. She called Carter over to see Kayla and they all apologized. They went to lunch and saw Selena and their friendship bond was restored. After she started refining her powers, Ms. Ferril, saw how much she was improving. Kayla still had challenges with spells but with her mentor's help, she was able to control her magic better. Despite this, she still occasionally has trouble using her Sparkling Flame powers and injures other people accidentally with fire or may burn others. Also, she has become a little more open towards others but is still reserved and scared that others might see her as weak. She is also still not fully confident in her fairy powers. She hopes to one day become an Enchantix fairy and receive the title of Guardian of the Sparkling Flame on her home planet.

RP Moderator Posts : 9973

MK, the biggest thing wrong for me atm is, The history is barer than a bone. It tells us literally nothing of the ocs past, about her growing up, about why she goes to alfea and more. We need details and explain the guardian of the sparkling flame. If its a power that's on par with the dragon flame, then you must take it out.

Also, it should be noted, that for the rp timeline, Domino was frozen for 155 years. so she would have only found out about her powers within the last 4 years or so. Making her 14th birthday season 4ish from the rps perspective.

You also need to expand on the personality, she needs more negative and positive traits to me.

Subject: Re: Kayla, Fairy of the Sparkling Flame Mon Aug 10, 2015 4:58 am

I've edited the history and personality. Is it acceptable?

RP Moderator Posts : 9973

MK it should be noted, that for the rp timeline, Domino was frozen for 155 years. so she would have only found out about her powers within the last 4 years or so. Making her 14th birthday season 4ish from the rps perspective. You character can not attend Alfea at the age of 14. She can only start at the age of 17 and as thus will be a first year student who starts the bottom.

Also, the others will touch upon things that still need to be fixed.

Subject: Re: Kayla, Fairy of the Sparkling Flame Mon Aug 10, 2015 5:12 am

Okay I changed her grade.

Sirenix Fairy Posts : 5304 Age : 33 Location : New Zealand

Quote :: Powers: Her powers are fire based. She has the ability to make and manipulate fire and heat. When she creates fire/heat, she can make shining flames to attack her enemies

Please remove that and place with Sparkling Flame. That is all we need to know with what kind of power she has.

Quote :: Spells: Fire Energy (most powerful spell), Fire Wall, Hot Spring, Fire of Life, Fairy's Dragon

Sorry, but you have to explain which one does and what level it is (Low, Medium or High)

Quote :: Strengths:Since Kayla has fire powers, she is interested in how heat relates to physics.

This is more of a interest than a strength. Please put this in her personality section.

Quote :: She has the best grades in her science and math classes.

One subject as a strength please.

Quote :: She is also very athletic

How is she athletic? What makes her stand out more than an average athletic person?

Quote :: and can feel people's inner emotions.

Ok, how does this work?

Quote :: Weaknesses: Since Kayla is a stubborn and science oriented nerd, she is not open to working in more artistic or creative areas

Please rewrite this as a weakness or put it in the personality area.

Quote :: and doesn't like to admit to others when she's wrong.

How does this connects being stubborn? Please explain.

Quote :: She can also be too competitive

Too competitive for what? Sports? Science gatherings? What?

Quote :: and even though she can detect someone's emotions, she is not good at responding to someone's emotions in the right way and might say or do the wrong thing.

Ok, this conflicts about what you have in the strengths.

Personality should be place before history.

Quote :: Personality: She is a headstrong and stubborn girl that is heavily interested in how physics affects the universe. She is mainly inquisitive about how her powers affect the world around her. In social relationships, she may not be people smart and may come off as rude and impolite. However, she is really more vulnerable and nicer than she seems, but she doesn't know how to respond to social cues.

Sorry, but this makes no sense at all. Please write it to make it sound like it's making sense.

Quote :: History: 17 years ago Kayla was born on the planet of Domino

That is impossible for her to be born 17 years ago when Domino was still frozen solid.

Quote :: She is the guardian of the Sparkling Flame.

How did she become guardian in the first place??? And how did she find out about it? Details!!!

Quote :: She found out about her powers when she was 14.

How? What made her to discover her powers?

Sorry, but everything needs expanding. We do have a guide about how to do it correctly.
https://believeinwinx.forumotion.com/t4496-guide-to-making-an-oc

Also, we do have an RP timeline that explains what happened so far.
https://believeinwinx.forumotion.com/t4802-the-offical-rp-timeline

Subject: Re: Kayla, Fairy of the Sparkling Flame Mon Aug 10, 2015 6:49 am

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RP Moderator Posts : 9973

MK, power would just be fire. Not Sparkling Fire. MK, I'm going to ask you to expand more on this guardian thing and if its important or anything, cuz honestly, it makes little sense to me. And why is she 21 now?

Subject: Re: Kayla, Fairy of the Sparkling Flame Mon Aug 10, 2015 2:17 pm

Your OC needs quite a bit of work.

Origin:
Your OCs origin is from a self made planet. Planets made by people are supposed to be submitted here https://believeinwinx.forumotion.com/t4933-fanmade-planets And made according to the guidelines to provide clarity about the heritage of your character.

Spells:
You have two high level spells which requires a minimum of two low level spells. (For each high level spell it's mandatory to counter balance it with a low level spell) You only have one low level spell. (Assuming Fire Energy also counts as a high level spell). You are allowed to have up to eight spells in total so you might want to add a bit more since you only have four at the moment.

Fire Energy: Please expand on the spell's effects, now it's rather vague and very hard to determine what the true effects of the spell would be, is it an area of effect or is the spell targeted? Does it deal damage or can the spell ignite flammables as well as doing damage? Is someone stunned when hit or staggered?

Fire wall: Please expand on the spell's effects, does it do anything except for blocking spells and projectiles? How long does the spell last and what's the measurement of the wall. Mind this is a high level spell so you can have the wall have more impact than just a blocker.

Fire of life: Feels a bit lackluster for a medium level spell, perhaps add the added benefit of enhanced fire resistance opposed by increased cold vulnerability to make the ability overall more dynamic in use.

Appearance:
Due to the drawing being rather unclear you should add a written descriptor of what she looks like as well for clarity towards the other players in the RP.

Personality:
Wisdom and intelligence are two different things entirely. Usually wisdom takes root with experience while intelligence is more an innate thing. For example, one might know a lot from books yet is utterly inept to handle real life situations. Knowledge isn't the same as wisdom so you might want to rephrase that bit.

History:
Needs to be expanded. Give some examples of all her personality traits and how they came to be during her life before Alfea in order to give your character some more depth.

Subject: Re: Kayla, Fairy of the Sparkling Flame Tue Aug 11, 2015 4:29 pm

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