Mia Harper

Subject: Mia Harper Wed Jul 15, 2015 12:30 pm

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Name:Mia Harper
Age:16
Gender:Female
What creature are you?:Fairy
Race:Lynphean
Allegiance:Good
Orgins:Magic user
Powers:Earth

Appearance: Mia has a greenish yellowish shirt with a flower on it and a dark green skirt and a flower headband she has blue eyes and dark brown hair with a green highlight in her hair.

Strenghts: Mia is good at science shes also good at math shes also VERY good at finding a hurt plant she also is very adept at locating and treating injured plants or sick plants shes also athletic and very good at sports.

Weaknesses: She can have a hot temper when someones bullying her freinds because she gets in trouble and fights she can have some bad dreams when she thinks about her family and she always seems to get lost alot.

Personality: Mia is kind shy and a little bit of a hot head shes also a very heartbroken person sometimes Mia also is a bit of a genius and she has little bit of dumbness in her she can get mean if someone dislikes her choices and her kindess shes also very rude sometimes and she kinda gets mad all over someone hating her favorite shows and she can be a bit of a rebel she's also a bit of a rule follower not to much though she can get mean if someone dislikes her choices and kindness.

Spells: Natures aura: she brings all nature to her and they attack every villain within a radius of 6 and Mia has to concentrate (high)

Natures protection: A prety strong shield made of flowers appears shielding Mia (medium)

Spring arrow: an arrow shoots out of her hand and hurts the enemy a bit (low)

Natures cage: cages go beneath every villain around her it lasts for 16 seconds (low)

Natures light: all of the plants around her swirl trough her hair and she gets a little shine in her and it defeats low level monsters within the radius of 4 (medium)

Flower genesis: all flowers around her glow brightly and when this happens very weak villains get teleported into a jungle (High)

Nature punch: she smacks any villain and plants tie them up for 17 seconds (medium)

History: When Mia was 7 she bumped into a really rude girl Mia apoligized but the girl slapped her and walked away Mia then went back home but when she got there something was missing it was her most favorite people in the whole world her four brothers who were much younger than her they never returned until the day Mia turned 9 Mia was crying until the day they came back she hugged them her brothers were a tiny bit older now they were 6 but one of her brothers slowly backed away from Mia scaredly as if the brother found something it was a powerful energy in the boy Mia asksed her brothers where they were but Mia felt something was missing and something was wrong and that missing part was her one most important thing is and aways will be her father. Her brothers ran off into the woods as they felt someone or something was there thats when they went missing. When Mia was 11 she felt like a piece of her life was missing but she didnt care but she told her parents about an ogre she saw outside she was so scared she shielded her self but that was at the time when she didnt know how to use her magic. Her sister could teach her since she was a older. She knew how to defeat the ogre outside but then Mia was so scared for her family she used a spell she didnt even know was a real spell the spell was "Natures light" it was then when she found out she was a fairy. Then when she was 15 she saw her sister getting hurt so she used another spell that acctualy destroyed the creature that was hurting her sister. When she was 16 she found out about Alfea she asked her parents if she could go and they said yes now she lives an almost peacful life in Alfea. She still fills a piece in her life is missing.

Subject: Re: Mia Harper Thu Jul 16, 2015 4:40 pm

zerowing21 wrote:: Just gonna say this now, but Nature's genesis being a teleport spell that sends people away should be high.

Nature's light shouldn't really be a high level spell since low crumby monsters are easy to take out with a medium spell or lower.

With Nature wind, what effects do those flowers have once they cover up the foe?

Ok il fix the first two and the effect the flowers have on the enemy is it makes them SUPER itchy wich means there gonna be very itchy.

RP Moderator Posts : 9973

Then please add that detail and how long would the itching last?

Subject: Re: Mia Harper Thu Jul 16, 2015 4:58 pm

It lasts for 16 seconds and UPDATED

Subject: Re: Mia Harper Thu Jul 16, 2015 5:22 pm

Alright, I'm going to be rather straight forward with you and tell you there is quite a bit of work that needs to be done. Zerowing had already started with your nature wind spell, yet a lot more has to happen.

Natures aura: she brings all nature to her and they attack every villain around her (high)
This spell is good in essence but needs a couple of tweaks. Either you will have to add a fixed duration or you must concentrate to keep the spell effect up (When you concentrate you cannot cast any other spells)
Also, you have a selective area of effect while these kind of effects tend to just affect everything within the radius of the effect. You must also add what the radius of your effect is so there is a fixed indication about the size of your spell

Natures key: every key from every nature place comes to her because theres always a hurt plant (medium)
Please explain what this spell exactly does, because honestly I have no idea what to imagine here.

Spring arrow: an arrow shoots out of her hand and damages about 3% (low)
Spell is fine but other than we're not working with percent damage or any numerical value to indicate damage, 3% would be a pinprick and even underpowered for a low level spell.

Natures light: all of the plants around her swirl trough her hair and she gets a little shine in her and it defeats low leven monsters (high)
I assume this attack is specialized against the use of swarming monsters, where each individual unit isn't particularly strong yet together they form a problem. Same as with your other area of effect spell this needs to have an indicated radius.

Flower genesis: all flowers around her glow brightly and when this happens all villains get teleported into a jungle (medium)
This is an absolute no-go, teleporting an unwilling target just like that is impossible, however I am willing to allow you to teleport a severely weakened target, or a target rendered helpless (paralyzed, asleep or unconscious). Otherwise it is way too strong.

Nature punch: she smacks any villain (of her choice haha) and plants tie them up (medium)
What is the duration of the entanglement, and is the affected target still able to fight/cast spells.

RP Moderator Posts : 9973

MC, don't be discouraged by what nikkie said, We'll help ya with this.

Subject: Re: Mia Harper Thu Jul 16, 2015 6:49 pm

Ok but I have to do some things so il be here anytime but gotta go

RP Moderator Posts : 9973

Alright how is, "she can get mean if someone dislikes her choices and her kindness" a weakness? This sound more like a personality trait.

Subject: Re: Mia Harper Sat Jul 18, 2015 10:18 pm

Ok ok il fix that.

RP Moderator Posts : 9973

If you can explain how it can become a weakness, then it will be accepted

RP Moderator Posts : 9973

MC, we should get back to work on your character. You really need to expand on your characters history, it feels rather short and needs more like how was her child hood like and her family life.